3/16/17 - Zabrina Branning

Today in class, Mr. Rivers discussed with us how after reviewing some of our ‘Best Drafts of All Time’, he found that some of us didn’t take “Best Draft” too seriously. He explained how he disappointingly found that a good number of us did not have an introduction for our research quotes, or possibly didn’t even cite them. He also brought it to our attention that he found that if we used our time a little more wisely last week in drafting, that our drafts most likely would have looked much better. He then went on to lecturing about evidence, and ideal ways to introduce the background information. We also took some time to look at some claims on the movie Beauty and the Beast. We also read and identified the problems with a paragraph that was giving a person’s review on the movie, and the paragraph did not have an introduction to the quote or a strong analysis of the evidence following it. It was also missing an official citation of where the quote came from. We looked over and focused on some of the issues with the way that the paragraph was written. We looked at the paragraph after it was drafted and fixed three more times, as the introduction, citation, and quote were all fixed to make the paragraph flow and make more sense to the reader, as the claim or topic of the paragraph transitions to the quote itself, with a stronger introduction that provides context and specificity to the information. The final paragraph differed from where it began with the way it flowed and how the information  was presented, and the quote was shortened so that it was more appealing for an audience to read.